Notes from the feedback:
- 2nd shot, remove and place at the end
- For the 2nd set of graphics, use a different font, perhaps the same as the title?
- Need to make those graphics fit into the style of the title, perhaps add a clipping mask of ink
- 4 star empire review breaks up the suspense, use shot of her getting grabbed
- Maybe add a boom and fade back in after the black
- 2 car shots don't work
- Take out 'improv side car 1' use it to make it clear that they're in a car
- Hold longer on the 3 shot, to send the message that they can't decide
- 4 stars should be placed her, between the shot of them not being able to decide and the car in order to show that they are separate
- Montage, layer in booms
- Music, hold at end and ramp back up
- Boom on the black at end
- Title should come in slower
- Ink drop needs more time
- Final music, ink drop should be in silence
- Use more booms, boom from title to credits
- Add a sound for the title, perhaps the breathing or clock??
As this was close to our final version we hoped that we wouldn't have too many negatives, thankfully we didn't as we took the advice on board from last time and made the necessary changes. Overall the main pointers were to clean up the title a bit, this we knew as we had only just put it in as well as change up the narrative graphics as at the moment they are fairly similar to each other. We were also advised to remove several shots which don't work, this is completely understandable. We also had plenty of positive feedback particularly towards our Full Circle ident and the title. We were were thankful that the title came out how it did, as when filming it we encountered several problems such as the reflection.
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